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求助帮忙翻译这首英文诗，看过或者玩过Fate的同学们最合适了！

这是外国宅为动漫Fate/Stay Night UBW所作的一篇长诗，希望哪位能够勇敢挑战，帮助翻译一下，感激不尽！！

Awaken——fate/stay night

Obstruction and destruction describe how I feel
And my skin my face I am ready to tear
Feeling the pain, crying, yet trying to peel
All the pain the sorrow, especially the fear
Every time the rain comes calling
I can see myself crashing and burning
Haunted I have become by my shadow
Drained by the cold, constrained and hollow
So pale that life knows no name
And the despair is molded with flesh and flame
Broken, with no will to survive
Dead, unattended, intended to strive
Helpless in my own body I have learned to kneel
And life fed me its suffering molded with blood and steel

[ falling yet rising]
Falling, I’ve come out of this world
Rising, I have vowed to lead like a bird
Yet the waves crash around me here and there
And sometimes the injustice starts to sound fair
My mind is incapable to repress the past
And life passes by way too fast
You fall to your kneels you be you plead
Can I be someone else?
For the times I hate myself [skillet lyrics]

[determined]
Yet I am determined not to break
Not to kneel, for my own sake
I am fragile, yet hard willed
And even if my blood you’ve spilled
I am the mountain in perseverance
So now watch me as I take my fighting stance
I am a fighter, I am the soil hard yet absorbent
Strong willed, iron fist, courageous not reluctant
And I swear by the blood that runs through my veins
That I will drive through life’s several endless lanes
And I will not break like a fragile vase
For I am the reaper, the leader
And I am the writer the speaker

[Fighting]
Can’t you see my fists are up ready to fight?
Ready to take the road not taken, to do what’s right?
Can you beat an unbeatable soul?
Can you break one that’s been broken un-whole?

How much can you drain with a body empty as mine
For when blood turns to wine know that it’s a sign
That I am beyond your reach, your words, your blames
And that I no more can fall under those mundane flames

{awakened}
I have awakened, eyes open wide
And my inner power I’ll never hide
I am the boulder that holds the world’s parts
Unbeatable, just like the river of tide
Emotions balanced with reason and hope
A person who will never speak of cutting the rope
I am the will of nature, unbeatable yet humane
You call my words nonsense, but I say for once I’m sane
I am life, and unlimited blade works
I am the spark the stream that spurs

"I am the bone of my sword.
Steel is my body, and fire is my blood.
I have created over a thousand blades.
Unknown to death.
Nor known to life.
Have withstood pain to create many weapons.
Yet, these hands will never hold anything.
So as I pray, 'Unlimited Blade Works'."

翻译完后会追加100分！！！ > <~~~~~ 十分感谢！
还请不要使用翻译工具直接翻译，多谢！

Answer 1

觉醒——命运长夜

我感受到阻挡和毁灭的气息
我的皮肤和面孔即将撕裂
我在痛楚之下呼喊，然而我试图消去这一切——
这一切的痛苦与悲伤，尤其是胆怯
每当雨水呼啸的时候
我仿佛看到自己在不断碰撞，不断燃烧
在自己的影子中我愈加焦虑不安
寒冷抽空我的力量，带来如此不适而空虚之感
这些不知名的生命是如此苍白无力
血肉与火焰刻画出一幅绝望
破碎，没有生还的希望
死亡，孤独，徒劳的努力
我已逐渐屈服于我内心的无助感
而生存又赋予我血和铁铸成的苦难

【坠落/亦是升华】
坠落，我堕出世界之外
升华，我发誓要如鸟儿一般直冲高空
然而浪潮在我四周冲击
在这世上，不公也常常被认作公正
我无法抑制对过去的回忆
而生命如此匆匆飞逝
人们屈于自己的软弱，并为自己辩护
我还能否成为另一种人？
这一刻我憎恨我自己

【抉择】
然而我已决定永不倒下
决不屈膝，只为不负我的尊严
纵我力量渺小，然而我意志坚决
即使你令我热血四溅
我仍是不倒的山峦
故我摆出战姿时，你要看着我
我是斗士，我是坚硬却能吸收万物的大地
我的意志强大，拳头坚硬，无所畏惧而毫不犹豫
我以血管中奔涌的血液立誓
我将于生命永无止境的长路上飞驰
我决不会如花瓶般易碎而脆弱
只因我是收割者，是领导者
是书写者是发言者

【战斗】
难道你看不到吗？我的拳头已准备好出击
我已准备去踏上那条没人走过的路，去做正确的事
你能击败一个不败的灵魂吗？
你能粉碎一个早已粉碎的人吗？

如我这般空虚的身体，你能再抽空多少？
当鲜血化作烈酒，这便是一个开端
从此我便凌驾于你之所及，超越你的言语，亦超越你的指责嘲讽
我便不再会溃败于你的平凡进攻之下

【觉醒】
我已觉醒，我的双目圆睁
我不会再压抑来自我身体深处的力量
我是承担整个世界重量的巨石
我如汹涌浪潮般不可抵挡
感情、理智与希望在此平衡
我将不再放弃，并尽我所能
我即是天意，强大而仁慈
你道我是胡言乱语，我却说我始终清醒
我即是生，是无限的剑制
我是溪流迸发的火花

我为我剑之骨
钢铁为身，烈焰为血
我曾手制千刃
未知于死
亦未知于生
我曾历尽苦痛以创制无数刀枪剑戟
然而终将一无所存
故如我所祈，无限剑制

1.我只看过F/SN，没看过UBW，所以可能诗里有对情节的暗指而我没领会出来的。
2.这首，写的是……土狼？土狼的小宇宙爆发史？
3.最后一段是经典台词，不知道有没有官方译文。
4.我写的这段翻译啊……有的地方是意译，有的地方是瞎译……有的地方不知所云，有的地方连语法都不太顺……我果然还是太挫= =
5.想要原文的直译的话可以再找我。
6.可喜欢红A了~

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感谢帮助，有些地方我拿去自己修改了两下，总体来看还是不错的！
个人觉得应该是不同阶段的小宇宙缓慢爆发史，因为最后一段描写的红A已经相当有觉悟了 =▽=

Answer 2

Awaken——fate/stay night

Obstruction and destruction describe how I feel
And my skin my face I am ready to tear
Feeling the pain, crying, yet trying to peel
All the pain the sorrow, especially the fear
Every time the rain comes calling
I can see myself crashing and burning
Haunted I have become by my shadow
Drained by the cold, constrained and hollow
So pale that life knows no name
And the despair is molded with flesh and flame
Broken, with no will to survive
Dead, unattended, intended to strive
Helpless in my own body I have learned to kneel
And life fed me its suffering molded with blood and steel

[ falling yet rising]
Falling, I’ve come out of this world
Rising, I have vowed to lead like a bird
Yet the waves crash around me here and there
And sometimes the injustice starts to sound fair
My mind is incapable to repress the past
And life passes by way too fast
You fall to your kneels you be you plead
Can I be someone else?
For the times I hate myself [skillet lyrics]

[determined]
Yet I am determined not to break
Not to kneel, for my own sake
I am fragile, yet hard willed
And even if my blood you’ve spilled
I am the mountain in perseverance
So now watch me as I take my fighting stance
I am a fighter, I am the soil hard yet absorbent
Strong willed, iron fist, courageous not reluctant
And I swear by the blood that runs through my veins
That I will drive through life’s several endless lanes
And I will not break like a fragile vase
For I am the reaper, the leader
And I am the writer the speaker

[Fighting]
Can’t you see my fists are up ready to fight?
Ready to take the road not taken, to do what’s right?
Can you beat an unbeatable soul?
Can you break one that’s been broken un-whole?

How much can you drain with a body empty as mine
For when blood turns to wine know that it’s a sign
That I am beyond your reach, your words, your blames
And that I no more can fall under those mundane flames

{awakened}
I have awakened, eyes open wide
And my inner power I’ll never hide
I am the boulder that holds the world’s parts
Unbeatable, just like the river of tide
Emotions balanced with reason and hope
A person who will never speak of cutting the rope
I am the will of nature, unbeatable yet humane
You call my words nonsense, but I say for once I’m sane
I am life, and unlimited blade works
I am the spark the stream that spurs

"I am the bone of my sword.
Steel is my body, and fire is my blood.
I have created over a thousand blades.
Unknown to death.
Nor known to life.
Have withstood pain to create many weapons.
Yet, these hands will never hold anything.
So as I pray, 'Unlimited Blade Works'."

翻译：

唤醒——命运之夜阻塞和破坏描述我的感觉我的皮肤，我的脸我准备撕裂疼痛的感觉，哭泣，但试图剥开所有的痛苦，悲伤，尤其是恐惧每到下雨的时候打电话我能看到自己的崩溃和燃烧困扰我已成为我的影子排出的冷，约束和空心如此的苍白，生活没有名字和绝望是塑造血肉和火焰破碎，没有生存的意志死，无人值守，意在争取无奈我身上我学到了跪我的痛苦和生命与血液和钢模[还]会上升落下，我来到了这个世界上升，我发誓要带领像鸟但我在这里和那里的海浪有时听起来开始公平不公平我的心灵是不能压制的过去和生命的流逝的太快了你你你你跪下求情我可以成为别人吗？我的恨我自己[歌词]煎锅[确定]然而，我坚决不打破不跪，我为自己的缘故我很脆弱，但艰难的意志即使我的血，你已经溢出我是高山毅力所以现在看我，我把我的战斗姿态我是一个斗士，我是努力吸收土壤意志坚强，勇敢的铁拳，不愿意我发誓的血液贯穿我的静脉我将穿越人生的几个无尽的车道我不喜欢一个易碎的花瓶我是死神，领导我是作家，演讲者[战斗]你看不到我的拳头上准备好战斗了吗？准备带不走的路，做正确的事？你能打败无敌的灵魂吗？你能打破，打破了un-whole？多少钱你能排水体空矿当血液变成酒，知道这是一个标志我是无法达到的，你的话，你的批评和我没有更多可以在这些平凡的火焰唤醒}{我醒来时，眼睛睁开和我的内在力量我不会躲藏我是石头，拥有世界各地无与伦比的，就像河流的潮汐情绪平衡的原因和希望一个人谁也不会说切割绳我是自然的意志，无与伦比的尚未人道你打电话给我的话，但我说一次我是清醒的我的生活，和无限刀片厂我是火花流，马刺队“我是我的剑的骨头。钢铁是我的身体，和火是我的血液。我已经建立了一千个叶片。未知的死亡。也不知道生活。顶住疼痛创造许多武器。然而，这双手将永远不会拥有任何东西。故如我祈求，无限刃工程''。”

Answer 3

escribe how I feel
阻塞和毁灭描述表达我内心的感觉

And my skin my face I am ready to tear
我的脸,我的皮肤我准备眼泪

Feeling the pain, crying, yet trying to peel
感觉疼痛,哭泣,但是要脱落

All the pain the sorrow, especially the fear
所有的痛苦悲伤,特别是恐惧

Every time the rain comes calling
每次雨水时打电话

I can see myself crashing and burning
我看到我自己的撞击和焚烧

Haunted I have become by my shadow
我已经成为我闹鬼的影子

Drained by the cold, constrained and hollow
排水的冷,约束和空洞

So pale that life knows no name
如此苍白,生活不知道名字

And the despair is molded with flesh and flame
和绝望是塑造与肉体和火焰

Broken, with no will to survive
破碎,没有将生存

Dead, unattended, intended to strive
死时,便要努力

Helpless in my own body I have learned to kneel
在我自己的身体无助我已经学会下跪的

And life fed me its suffering molded with blood and steel
喂我的痛苦和生命塑造与血液和钢

[ falling yet rising]
[下降但上升)

Falling, I’ve come out of this world
跌倒,我走出这个世界

Rising, I have vowed to lead like a bird
上升,我誓言带领像一只鸟

Yet the waves crash around me here and there
然而我周围海浪事故这里和那里

And sometimes the injustice starts to sound fair
更糟糕的是,有时会开始声音不公正公平

My mind is incapable to repress the past
我的心是无法抑制过去

And life passes by way too fast
经过方式和生活太快了

You fall to your kneels you be you plead
你落在你的跪你就是你争辩

Can I be someone else?
我能成为别人呢?

For the times I hate myself [skillet lyrics]
我恨我自己为《泰晤士报》[锅歌词)

[determined]
[确定]

Yet I am determined not to break
然而我决心不休息

Not to kneel, for my own sake
不跪着,我为自己的缘故

I am fragile, yet hard willed
我是脆弱的,但硬决意

And even if my blood you’ve spilled
即使你已经溢出我的血

I am the mountain in perseverance
我是山区的毅力

So now watch me as I take my fighting stance
所以现在看我,我把我的格斗姿势

I am a fighter, I am the soil hard yet absorbent
我是一个斗士,我是土壤努力却的吸水性

Strong willed, iron fist, courageous not reluctant
坚强、铁拳头,勇敢的不是不情愿的

And I swear by the blood that runs through my veins
我发誓,我的血管里的血液,贯穿

That I will drive through life’s several endless lanes
我会开车穿过人生的几个无尽的通道

And I will not break like a fragile vase
我将不会中断像易碎的花瓶

For I am the reaper, the leader
因为我收割者、领袖

And I am the writer the speaker
我是作家和演讲者

[Fighting]
[战斗]

Can’t you see my fists are up ready to fight?
你没看见我的拳头是时刻准备着去战斗吗?

Ready to take the road not taken, to do what’s right?
准备采取公路不采取,做什么是正确的吗?

Can you beat an unbeatable soul?
你能打败一个无与伦比的灵魂吗?

Can you break one that’s been broken un-whole?
你能找开的一个un-whole打破了吗?

How much can you drain with a body empty as mine
你能在多大程度上吸取身躯空是我的吗

For when blood turns to wine know that it’s a sign
因为当血使酒知道这是一个迹象

That I am beyond your reach, your words, your blames
我离你远的、你的言语,你的批评

And that I no more can fall under those mundane flames
可以,我不再属于那些世俗的火焰

{awakened}
{唤醒}

I have awakened, eyes open wide
我已经觉悟,眼睛敞开

And my inner power I’ll never hide
我的内在力量,我绝对不会躲起来

I
我

Answer 4

求助帮忙翻译这首英文诗，看过或者玩过Fate的同学们最合适了！
希望对你有用啊。
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Robinleonard
2011/12/8 00:31:54 Death be not proud, though some have called thee 死亡，不要骄傲，虽然有人说你 Mighty and dreadfull, for, thou art not soe, 强大而又可怖，而你并不真的这样 For, those, whom thou think'st, thou dost overthrow, 因为你只是威吓害怕你的人们。 Die not, poore death, nor yet canst thou kill mee. 可怜的死亡，本身无法死亡，也不能将我杀死。 From rest and sleepe, which but thy pictures bee, 休憩与睡眠，这就是你的写照， Much pleasure, then from thee, much more must flow, 无数的欢乐，也是从你，涌流出来， And soonest our best men with thee doe goe, 我们中的最优秀的人随你去得越早， Rest of their bones, and soules deliverie. 越能早日获得身体的休息，灵魂的解脱。 Thou art slave to Fate, Chance, kings, and desperate men, 你是奴隶，服从于命运、机会、君王和亡命之徒， And dost with poison, warre, and sicknesse dwell, 在毒药、战争与疾病间徘徊 And poppie, or charmes can make us sleeps as well, 鸦片、迷药也可以让我们甜美地睡去 And better than thy stroake; why swell'st thou then? 那么你的突然降临又有什么好呢？你又为什么骄傲？ One short sleepe past, wee wake eternally, 一旦短暂的睡眠过去，我们将永远觉醒 And death shall be no more; death, thou shalt die. 死亡再也不会有，死亡，你自己应该死去！ 地址：参考资料：

Answer 5

唤醒——命运之夜阻塞和破坏描述我的感觉我的皮肤，我的脸我准备撕裂疼痛的感觉，哭泣，但试图剥开所有的痛苦，悲伤，尤其是恐惧每到下雨的时候打电话我能看到自己的崩溃和燃烧困扰我已成为我的影子排出的冷，约束和空心如此的苍白，生活没有名字和绝望是塑造血肉和火焰破碎，没有生存的意志死，无人值守，意在争取无奈我身上我学到了跪我的痛苦和生命与血液和钢模[还]会上升落下，我来到了这个世界上升，我发誓要带领像鸟但我在这里和那里的海浪有时听起来开始公平不公平我的心灵是不能压制的过去和生命的流逝的太快了你你你你跪下求情我可以成为别人吗？我的恨我自己[歌词]煎锅[确定]然而，我坚决不打破不跪，我为自己的缘故我很脆弱，但艰难的意志即使我的血，你已经溢出我是高山毅力所以现在看我，我把我的战斗姿态我是一个斗士，我是努力吸收土壤意志坚强，勇敢的铁拳，不愿意我发誓的血液贯穿我的静脉我将穿越人生的几个无尽的车道我不喜欢一个易碎的花瓶我是死神，领导我是作家，演讲者[战斗]你看不到我的拳头上准备好战斗了吗？准备带不走的路，做正确的事？你能打败无敌的灵魂吗？你能打破，打破了un-whole？多少钱你能排水体空矿当血液变成酒，知道这是一个标志我是无法达到的，你的话，你的批评和我没有更多可以在这些平凡的火焰唤醒}{我醒来时，眼睛睁开和我的内在力量我不会躲藏我是石头，拥有世界各地无与伦比的，就像河流的潮汐情绪平衡的原因和希望一个人谁也不会说切割绳我是自然的意志，无与伦比的尚未人道你打电话给我的话，但我说一次我是清醒的我的生活，和无限刀片厂我是火花流，马刺队“我是我的剑的骨头。钢铁是我的身体，和火是我的血液。我已经建立了一千个叶片。未知的死亡。也不知道生活。顶住疼痛创造许多武器。然而，这双手将永远不会拥有任何东西。故如我祈求，无限刃工程''。”