Question

帮我看看这篇英语作文有什么错误以及不妥，Thanks

1.目前不少父母为了孩子包办一切
2.为了让孩子独立，父母应该....
Nowadays,many parents have prepared everything for their children from their birth.So these children's self-care abilties are gradually held in contempt by many parents.More and more children know nothing about the housework such as mopping,cleaning and so forth,and what's more,some children can't peel eggs.The prevalence of the problem has become a hot button accross society.Its existence has even greatly impacted the future of our country which the government could not afford to ignore and prepare to take some positive measures to come up with the problem,according to the online edition of the people daily.
There are a couple of driving forces,I would argue,behind this undesirable tide.On one hand,in these parent's eyes,only study score plays a significant role during all life of kids so that they ignore education in other aspects such as moral education.On the other hand,with the implementation of family-planning policy,children are only children nowadays,the care and doting that they received exceed their fathers and grandfathers, so their dependence is relatively large.
As confucius instructed,it is better late than never.Prompt and strict measures should be taken turn back this evil trend.To help their children to be independent,parents should resist the urge to jump in and give their children more responsibilitys and decision-making powers so that they may develop an internal locus of contol.In addition ,parents can teach their children to ask for what they need and support them in being accountable for their decisions.Finally,parents can set clear boundaries and provide their children with advice and guidance.It is beneficial for the child to make decisions and learn from their mistakes.I believe that so long as it is properly and carefully operated,we are bound to modify this evil trend in the days ahead.

Answer 1

Nowadays,many parents have prepared everything for their children from their birth (加on). So these children's self-care abilties are gradually held in contempt （hold in contemp是轻视，这里用弱化比较好，undermined）by many（改成their） parents.More and more children know nothing（用little好吧？同样也是否定，但没有nothing这么彻底） about the housework such as mopping,cleaning and so forth, and what's more,some children can't （加even，表示“甚至”）peel eggs.The prevalence of the problem has become a hot button accross society. Its existence has even greatly impacted the future of our country which the government could not afford to ignore and prepare to take some positive measures to come up with the problem,according to the online edition of the people daily.（本句想表达什么有些乱，the People Daily人民日报）
There are a couple of driving forces,I would argue,behind this undesirable tide. On one hand,in these parent's eyes,only study score plays a significant role during all life of kids so that they ignore education in other aspects such as moral education（改成：they only note the importance of study rather than personal development of their chirldren in other aspects
）.On the other hand,with the implementation of family-planning policy,children are only children（什么叫children are children?） nowadays,the care and doting（？什么意思） that they received exceed their fathers and grandfathers, so their dependence is relatively large（large不对，整句改好再看换哪个词）.
As confucius instructed,it is better late than never. Prompt and strict measures should be taken （加to）turn back this evil trend.To help their children to be independent（罗嗦，To make the children independent）,parents should resist the urge to jump in and （建议用as well as）give their children more responsibilitys（名词复数错了） and decision-making powers so that they may develop an internal locus（？什么词） of contol.In addition ,parents can teach their children to ask for what they need and support them in being accountable for their decisions (改成：give supports when they are in trouble）.Finally,parents can set clear boundaries and provide their children with advice and guidance.It is beneficial for the child to make decisions and learn from their mistakes.I believe that so long as it is properly and carefully operated,we are bound to modify this evil（没这么严重吧，换个温和些的词吧） trend in the days ahead.

最后，我的感觉是，你太强调使用范文的一些例句，不是不可以，但要用得适当、恰当，而不给人生搬硬套的感觉。最基础的东西要加强，这才是最重要的，结构清晰、用词正确

追问

On the other hand,with the implementation of family-planning policy,children are only children（什么叫children are children?） nowadays,the care and doting（？什么意思） that they received exceed their fathers and grandfathers, so their dependence is relatively large（large不对，整句改好再看换哪个词）.
doting我想表达的是溺爱，large不行？serious?

追答

On the other hand,with the implementation of family-planning policy, most of Chinese family have only one child, who is greatly spoiled by the excessive care and love from his parents and even grandparents, thus leading to his dependence heavier than ever before.

追问

还有个I believe that so long as it is properly and carefully operated,we are bound to modify this evil（没这么严重吧，换个温和些的词吧） trend in the days ahead.

undesirable如何？

追答

undesirable is much better, good!
I believe more understanding and attention while less doting and interference may gradually get this undesirable issue fade out in the near future.

Answer 2

第一行， from their birth改成since they were born.
句子完成了，就用句号，别老用逗号，不对。cleaning and so forth.What's more,some ...
报刊名字要大写。 the people daily.
these parent's eyes ... parent's 改成parents'
孔子，首字母大写
better late than never。。。这个真的和孔子有关么。。
in the days ahead.。。。改成in the coming days. ahead 是副词。
简单的看了一下，没什么大问题，注意细节就好了

追问

better late than never。。。这个真的和孔子有关么。。
in the days ahead.。。。改成in the coming days. ahead 是副词。
这两个地方都引用了相应例句
As Confucius instructed, it is better late than never. （没变，百度一下可在范文中找到）
I am firmly convinced that through our combined efforts we are bound to enjoy more risk-free foods in the days ahead. 百度一下也可在范文中找到
模仿的应该不错吧

追答

第一个既然找到了就好，孔子这样的名词都要大写。
第二个，我是真心不知道，但是换了个保险的词。你写的是四六级作文么。

追问

想用六级作文考四级

追答

那你就注意一下用词，高级当然好，但是不要错用，不要让高级的词出现的太多，适当的用普通的词，四级还是注重结构，注重全文的严谨，一个文章出现几个复杂句就好了，长短结合，不会用的句子不要套用，出个小错误就直接给你的文章降级了，比如标点啊，大小写啊什么的。可以背几个经典的开头或结尾套用一下，意思表达清楚，保险为好。
比如children's self-care abilties，个人觉得换成their abilities to do sth. 就好点。
就这一篇来讲，感觉词数有点多。。120出头就行。第一段，简单的点明有什么现象，第二段具体分析原因，注明有几点，第三段写上个人的建议或愿望。根据通篇的词数来调整段长。最后注意书写工整就没问题了。个人观点，参考。

Answer 3

Nowadays, many parents have prepared everything for their children. The irony is that many children nowadays lack basic life skills which is a source of headache for parents. Children are not involved in household chores. They are not capable of doing a simple task like peeling an egg. According to the online edition of the People Daily, the prevalence of the problem greatly affects the future of our country and the government plans to take some positive measure in dealing with this problem.
In my opinion, one of the reasons behind this undesirable trend is that parents pay too much importance in the child's education leaving out the moral aspect of education like character and values. China's one-child policy makes Chinese children the center of attention of the family. Typically there are at least four persons (parents and two sets of grandparents) doting on that child. As a result, children rely heavily on them and they never had the chance of fending for themselves.
Prompt and strict measures should be taken to counter this trend.To help their children to be independent, parents should resist the urge to jump in and do things for their children. Parents should give their children more responsibilities. Children should be taught to decide for themselves, but making them accountable for their actions. Furthermore, parents should teach their children to ask for what they need and support them. Finally, parents should set clear boundaries and provide their children with advice and guidance.It is beneficial for the child to make decisions for themselves and learn from their mistakes.I believe that in dong so, we are looking at a brighter future in the days ahead.