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Currently,therearemoreandmorepeopletendtochoosetravelingtospendtheirsparetime.Andnatu...
Currently, there are more and more people tend to choose traveling to spend their spare time.And naturally, there comes up couple of contraditions: Some people deem that traveling in their own country is more beneficial than traveling to foreign countries. Other people believe that people benifit more from traveling to foreign countries than from domestic travel.However, can anybody doubt that the disire of traveling to foreign countries is far too intense? For me, I extreemly agree with the latter statement.The reasons are listed as follows:
To start with, traveling to oversee places can broaden our horizons, which means that people who travel abroad can acquaint the custom and culture in foreign countries. If you visit some well-known spots, we can understand their civilization as well, which is better than just studying those thing in your own country.Take myselfe in to example, I used to attended a summer camp to travel to USA for 3 weeks. In my journey, I visit many mamorial hall, in this case, I learn what US spirit is, and a little bit US history.
Secondly, financial problem is a major and primory reason to the public, especially the middle class habitants.It is publicly believed that, traveling domestically is way too cheap than overseas travels. But let me make an assumption, if people take saving money as a excuse, can people experience more and better than traveling abroad? The answer is: no!
Last but not least, traveling to foreign countries can possibly give travelors some unexpected things. For instance, people can deeply be familiar about how there local people communicate, and learn some significant skiils of commutication during talking to the foreigner. Moreover, like me, after I finish my travel, I was attracted by the custom and universities' culture in America. Thereby, I started to chase my dream of studying abroad. It means that traveling to foreign countries will presumably be a kickpoint to people.
In a nutshell, based on the oppinion I've given above, traveling oversea has more advantages than traveling in our own country. 展开
To start with, traveling to oversee places can broaden our horizons, which means that people who travel abroad can acquaint the custom and culture in foreign countries. If you visit some well-known spots, we can understand their civilization as well, which is better than just studying those thing in your own country.Take myselfe in to example, I used to attended a summer camp to travel to USA for 3 weeks. In my journey, I visit many mamorial hall, in this case, I learn what US spirit is, and a little bit US history.
Secondly, financial problem is a major and primory reason to the public, especially the middle class habitants.It is publicly believed that, traveling domestically is way too cheap than overseas travels. But let me make an assumption, if people take saving money as a excuse, can people experience more and better than traveling abroad? The answer is: no!
Last but not least, traveling to foreign countries can possibly give travelors some unexpected things. For instance, people can deeply be familiar about how there local people communicate, and learn some significant skiils of commutication during talking to the foreigner. Moreover, like me, after I finish my travel, I was attracted by the custom and universities' culture in America. Thereby, I started to chase my dream of studying abroad. It means that traveling to foreign countries will presumably be a kickpoint to people.
In a nutshell, based on the oppinion I've given above, traveling oversea has more advantages than traveling in our own country. 展开
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3分的样子，1.字数有点少，最好到400左右；2.书面语表达不规范，有口语的表达，比如出现了 a little bit，like me这样的口语表达，句式也很单一；3. 有拼写错误，比如myself和traveller拼写错了。如果前面综合写作听力够好能拿5分，那么写作这部分总分能拿24-25分。
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不是300字就够了吗？
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如果你想得4分300字是不够的
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