Question

英语提问：麻烦英语达人们帮我改一下这篇作文，看看有没有什么错误，非常谢谢。

A man was driving a speedboat across the water. When he tried to swing the speedboat round, the steering wheel came away in his hands and the speedboat was out of control. The man had hardly had time to realize what was happening when he was thrown violently into the sea. The speedboat had struck a buoy, but it continued to move very quickly across the water and no one was in it. The speedboat was moving towards a small fishing boat with two fishermen on it.
Meanwhile, the fishermen noticed with dismay that the speedboat came straight towards them at tremendous speed. They tried to row away, but the speedboat came nearer and nearer. The fishermen had to dive into the sea and swim towards the shore. The speedboat continued to move towards them, but it was slowing down rapidly. In less than a minute, the speedboat had run out of petrol and stopped just before it reached the fishermen.

Answer 1

A man was driving a speedboat 为什么要过去进行时呢？一般过去式drove才对啊
came away in his hands 到底是离开他的手还是在手里？？ 把in去掉
The man had hardly had time to realize what was happening when he was thrown violently into the sea 把第一个had去掉
and no one was in it. 把in改on
就改第一段吧，好辛苦啊！

Answer 2

我粗看看，应该没什么错误，不过你想优化一下的话，可以多用一些从句，如名词性从句，定语从句等