Question

帮我看看这篇英语作文有没有什么错误，顺便评一下分吧，满分10分。

Some students think students should dye their hair,because dye hair can change the colour of the hair.For example,a student like brown,but he don't like black,so he can make the hair brown.They also think dye hair can have their’s own style.And they will become a modern.The other students think students shouldn’t dye their hair,it will cost students much time and money,it’s harmful for people’s body.I think students ought not to dye hair.Though People’s appearance is important,People’s health is more important.Students should pay attention to study and other things,but not to dyeing hair.This is my opinion,how about you？
大小写就不要计较了。

Answer 1

Some students think (that,这是个从句，加上不加上都可以，但是加上会显得更通顺)students should dye their hair,because dyeing （because后面引导的是一个句子，所以动词变成动名词作主语）hair can change the colour of the hair.For example,a student likes（主语是单数，动词要用单三人称） brown,but he dosen't （注意动词的单三）like black,so （so可以改成then,意思是“那么”，用so就要翻译成“所以”了，不通顺）he can make the hair brown.They also think dye（词性！dyeing） hair can have （动词谓语和主语不搭配，翻译过来就是染发可以有自己的风格，应该是染发可以体现自己的风格，可以换成express，或者换个说法）their’s own style.And they will become a modern（你要表达的是他们将成为流行么？可以写成become much more modern）.The other(the other用错了，这个是用在两个人的时候one,the other的。你这里用others代替其他学生就可以) students think students shouldn’t dye their hair,it（这里的代词it用的不对，与前面的句子联系不上，最好加上关联词，as之类的） will cost students much time and money,it’s harmful for （be harmful to搭配错了）people’s body.I think students ought这（ought用的不好，这个情态动词太硬了，最好用would better） not to dye hair.Though People’s appearance is important,People’s health is more important.Students should pay attention to study and other things,but not to dyeing hair.This is my opinion,how about you？
要是评分。。。5分吧

Answer 2

Some students think students should dye their hair,because dye hair can change the colour of the hair.For example,a student likes brown,but he does not like black,so he can make the hair brown.They also think dye hair can have their own style.So that they are in the latest trend.On the other hand.students think students shouldn’t dye their hair,it will cost students much time and money. Dyeing of hair is harmful to people’s body. I think students ought not to dye the hair.Though, a person's appearance is important, personal health is more important.Students should pay attention to study and other things,but not to dyeing hair.This is my opinion,how about you？

Skilldo:take care of your tenses, example student likes brown hair, but he does not.....7/10 if you are in 初二

追问

Dyeing of hair is harmful to people’s body.这个地方可以不加of吗？还有我是初三的……

追答

可以。初三就6.5分吧。。。O(∩_∩)O哈哈~

Answer 3

On one hand,some students think students should dye their hair,because dying hair can change the colour of the hair.For example,a student likes brown,but he don't like black,so he can make the hair brown.They also think dying hair can have their own style.And they will become a trend.On the other hand,the other students think students shouldn’t dye their hair,as it will cost students much time and moneyand it’s harmful for people’s body.
I think students ought not to dye hair.Though People’s appearance is important,People’s health is more important.Students should pay attention to study and other things,but not to dying hair.This is my opinion,how about you？

Answer 4

有些地方dye要换成dying,因为它作主语对于重复出现的student和people可用代词替换

Answer 5

还好初二的话就很不错了10分