Question

急求英文的书面自我介绍

我叫李xx,今年23岁，2006年毕业于广州大学的国际贸易与法律专业。
在2006年至2007年期间在xx集团上班,职位是xx办统计员,主要负责(1)货物入库的数据处理(2)计算员工工资(3)人事上相关事宜(4)审核各商场的月报表；2007年至2008年期间在xx有限公司，职位是进出口部文员，主要负责（1）货物的进口报关（2）fabric的出口单据，用于收取货款（3）越南分厂的出口单据，用于收取货款及货物清关
虽然我的工作经验并不丰富，但是我诚实开朗，踏实，上进，刻苦好学，有上进心。对我担负起的每一项职责，尽我所能做到“热烈的开始，精彩的过程和完满的结束”。我会在工作中不断努力提升自己，做到最好。

Answer 1

My name is XX LI, graduated from Guangzhou University in 2006, majoring in International trade and law.
From 2006 to 2007, I have worked for XX group, holding the position as stastic clerk in the XX dep, and mainly responsible for (1)maintain goods input and output data (2)calculated salaries (3)HR related affairs (4)auditing monthly forms from every marketplace.
For the past one year, I have worked for XX company, holding the position as a clerk in exporting department, mainly responsible for(1)applying to customs for imported goods(2)filling exporting document for fabric, collecting pament for goods (3)filling exporting document for Viet Nam branck factory, collecting the money and clearing the customs.
What my resume does not shows is that I am an ambitious and hard working person, whom enjoys challenge from 希望的工作领域. Would you please consider me as an applicant for the position.

这篇CV是我请一位从事人事管理多年的外国友人代写的，给他提的要求就一个“尽量花哨些”；结果居然得到的是这篇在我们中国人眼里看来非常朴素的文章。

遗憾的是你的分真低啊，至少值80分的。