Question

改篇作文，并指正，给出分数

题目：英语书面表达 、假如你是在纽约的中国学生李华，你在学校图书馆找到一份临时工作，且Smith教授也要你做他的实验助手，这两份工作使你有800美元的月收入，足以应付日常开支；同时教授也同意你住在他家，不收房租；请你发E-mail告诉你的父母，请他们不必担心，说你会珍惜这难得的机会，努力学习，以便将来更好的为祖国服务。词数 在100字左右！
How is everything going recently? Please do not worry about me . I am fine here . Let me tell you a good news. I have got a part- time job in the library of our school which can support me an opportunity to communicate with more local people. Moreover ,Mr.Smith asked me to assist him in the lab. Both of the two jobs will bring me 800 dollars per month which can cover my daily expenses. Besides,Mr.Smith agreed that I can live with him in his flat with no rent. Therefore,everything is gong well.
I will value all these opportunities for it can make me more mature. I will also study hard in order that I can serve our motherland better in the future!
I am looking forward to your reply.
满分25，高考作文

Answer 1

have to worry that you will cherish this rare opportunity to study hard, to better serve the motherland. The number of words in about 100 words!
How is everything going recently? Please do not worry about me. I am fine here. Let me tell you a good news. I have got a part-time job in the library of our school which can support me an opportunity to communicate with more local people. Moreover, Mr.Smith asked me to assist him in the lab. Both of the two jobs will bring me 800 dollars per month which can cover my daily expenses. Besides, Mr.Smith agreed that I can live with him in his flat with no rent. Therefore, everything is gong well
I will of value all these opportunities for it can make me more mature I will also study hard in. order that I can serve our motherland better in the future!
I am looking forward to your reply.

Answer 2

如果少用点简单句，不句子加长一点，效果会更好哦！

Answer 3

太长了吧！22