Question

下面有一段考博英语的翻译题，我自己翻译了一下，感觉翻译的很不好，恳请牛人帮助翻译，万分感谢！

从亚洲及太平洋沿岸移民来的美国人在各个领域为美国做出了杰出的贡献。由于亚太裔移民的祖籍国家具有丰富多样的传统，他们来到美国以后，大大促进了美国文化的发展，提高了全美国人民的生活水平。美国高度评价亚太裔美国人的贡献，他们带来的勤奋精神促进了美国经济的发展。他们对自由的热爱振兴了美国自由民主的理想。他们的勇敢和毅力，生动的表明了人类对政治自由的一致渴望。

下面是我自己的翻译，如能指点一二，小弟更是不胜感激！
Immigrants from Asia and pacific coast area
have made an outstanding contribution to America in various fields.Because there
are so many traditions in their homelands, their coming promoted greatly the
development of American culture and improved living standards of American
people.
The contribution of immigrants from Asia
and pacific coast area are highly appreciated by Americans. Not only diligent
spirit they brings promoted American economic development but also their love
of freedom revitalize American ideal of freedom and democracy.
Their courage and willpower vividlydemonstrate human’s consistent desire for political freedom.

Answer 1

The American who came from Asia and Pacific coast made outstanding contribution to America in every field. Beause of the diversity traditions of ancestral home nation of Asia-Pacific immigrants they promoted the American culture development greatly and improved the American people`s living standard after they came to America. America set a high value on Asia-Pacific American and the diligent spirit taken by them promoted American economy development. Their ardent love of freedom developed vigorously the ideals of liberal American democracy. Their courage and willpower vividly shown consistent human’s desire for political freedom.

Answer 2

建议把整篇文章中的 America 换成 United States ,这样正式地道一点，不然就看起来很像中式英语

Answer 3

从亚洲及太平洋沿岸移民来的美国人在各个领域为美国做... Immigration from Asia and the Pacific coast to the Americans made an outstanding contribution to the United States in various fields. The Asia - Pacific - American immigrant originally from countries with rich and diverse tradition, after they came to the United States, greatly promote the development of American culture, enhance the living standards of the American people. The United States spoke highly of the contribution of Asian Pacific Americans, their diligent spirit and promoting the economic development of the United States. Their love of freedom the revitalization of American ideals of freedom and democracy. Their bravery and perseverance, vivid demonstrated mankind's unanimous desire for political freedom.都翻译成简单句了，有几个是从句。

Answer 4

这个……… 翻的 确实不太好哎