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family:
I have a wonderful family. My parents, two Brothers, my sister and me are my family members. Both of my parents are doctors; they are very strict and always educate us when we made mistakes. My father believes that knowledge can change one's fortune. So, my father supply more opportunities for me to study .My brother graduated from a university last year, and is working in a Hospital of Guangzhou. He is responsible for the younger sibling’s tuition expenses.
In the family, we get along with each other very well and I am lucky enough because I have a good family. My parents are the people I love the most and appreciate the most in the world.
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hometown：
I come from Jieyang，a beautiful city of Guangdong province ,it is located in the eastern of Guangdong not far from Shantou.It is a middle-sized developing city, it's population is six million . Our city is famous of food.
People in my hometown are very hardworking and open-minded. They can accept new things quickly, furthermore they like do their work in a efficient way. They like enjoy their colorful life.
I love my hometown. Especially I love its people. They are working hard so as to make it richer and more beautiful.

Answer 1

family

第二行，when we make mistakes
第三行，用change one’s life更好，我觉得
第四行，用more没有比较的对象，用many就可以。a universtiy的a可以去掉不用，显得更english
第五行的expense也可以省去不用

Answer 2

family:
I have a warm and happy family. There are my parents, two brothers of mine, my sisiter and me in the family. My parents both are doctors. They are very strict. When we made mistakes they will teach us how to treat it in a correct way. My father believes that knowledge can change people's future, so he gives me many opportunities to study. My brother graduated from university last year, right now he is working for a Hospital in Guangzhou.不明白你左右一句说的是什么。
In my family, we get along with each other very well, and I feel so lucky cause I have a good family. My parents are whom I love and appreciate the most in the world.

hometown：
I'm from Jieyang, a beautiful city in Guangdong province. it is located in eastern Guangdong and not far from Shantou.It is a middle-sized developing city. The population there is six million . It is famous for food.
People in my hometown are very hardworking and open-minded. They can accept new things quickly, furthermore, they like to do their work in a efficient way. They like to enjoy their colorful life.
I love my hometown. Especially I love the people there. They are working hard so as to make it richer and more beautiful.