Question

这句英语语法有错吗

我扔下西服冲下楼去告诉乔治。这是比“骇人听闻的秘密”更加惊人的东西，这是一具真正的骷髅啊！
Forsaking the suit, I ran downstairs to tell George. There was a more stupendous thing than the astonishing secret,which was a real skeleton
1、这句英语有没有语法错误，分析下
2、地道程度如何

Answer 1

1.语法上大体没有错，就是tell George后面不能是句号，应该用that 连接起来作为宾语从句。
2.我觉得非常不地道。
forsake是舍弃，放弃的意思，并不是把具体的某样东西丢下，所以不如直接用throwing the suit away,
至于 这是比“骇人听闻的秘密”更加惊人的东西，这是一具真正的骷髅啊！ 这句
金山词霸上有原句翻译，比你这个好：
This was worse than "a terrible secret";this was a real skeleton!

如果是我的话，我比较倾向这么写
Throwing the suit away, I ran downstairs to tell George that this was more horrifying than "a terrible secret"； this was a real skeleton!

Answer 2

A skeleton in the capboard
Dropping（放下） my suit, I dashed（冲） downstairs to tell George. This was worse than "a terrible secret'（骇人听闻的秘密）， this was a real skeleton! But George was unsympathetic（无情

Answer 3

a pile of bones with skeleton

I threw my suit off and dashing downstairs to inform George, this was worse than an unheardof shocking mystery. This was a real skeleton.