Question

自己写了一篇英语演讲稿，请大家帮我找一找语法错误，帮忙修改一下。谢谢

Hello,everyone
Today I want to talk something about my hometwon-Qingdao.Qingdao is a very beautiful and mordern city.Qingdao is famous for
her bathing beach,which is known by everyone.In fact,I think Laoshan Mountain is also a good attraction in Qingdao.It may
not be as tall as Mountain Tai.But it's scenery is much more beautiful than most of the moutains in our country.The air on
this mountain is pure and fresh.And besides LaoShan Mountain,I want to talk something about Qingdao's buildings.Because
Qingdao used to be occupied by German,most of Qingdao's buildings are in Germany style.You can see many buildings in
western style,which make Qingdao like a European country. Welcome to my hometown.That's all,thank you

Answer 1

第二句, 删去 something
twon 串错了, 是town
第三行的句子改成:Qingdao's bathing beach is famous
第四行 good 加上 tourist attraction
第六行 删去much(因为跟more重复了)
第七行 删去And, 删去 something
第八行 by german 加 in the past, most of 加the, in "German style"
第十行 make Qingdao "looks" like a European country
最后, That's all I want to say, thank you 比较好

Answer 2

Hello,everyone
Today I want to tell you something about my hometown-Qingdao.Qingdao is a very beautiful and mordern city.Qingdao is famous for it's bathing beach,which is known by everyone.In fact,I think the Laoshan Mountain is also a good attraction in Qingdao.It may not be as tall as the Mountain Tai.But it's scenery is much more beautiful than most of the moutains in our country.The air on
this mountain is pure and fresh.Except for LaoShan Mountain,I want to talk something about Qingdao's buildings.Because Qingdao used to be occupied by German,most of the buildings in Qingdao are in Germany style.You can see many buildings in western style,which make Qingdao like a European country. Welcome to my hometown.That's all,thank you

大概就是这样了〜

Answer 3

写的不错嘛，除了短句用太多。最好分一下点，别人听起来会清晰点，加个first，second之类的吧

Answer 4

倒数第二行 Like前加be