Question

英语厉害的进来!急!急!急!

这篇文章哪些地方有错,请帮忙指点出来~
Beijing is a big city . It's the capital of China and it's an ancient capital.
Beijing is the oldest city in China. It's about 3 thousand years old. It's in the east of China. The popoulation of Beijing is about 17 million. It's the seconed biggest cities in China. Beijing is a good place to visit.It's famous for the Great Wall and the Forbidden City. Now Beijing is becoming a modern and imternational city.
This year is 2008. The 29th Olympic Games will be held in Beijing in August. And the weather in beijing will be hot in August.
结尾用什么好呢?

Answer 1

Beijing is a big city . It's the capital of China and it's an capital city with a long history.
(ancient表示"远古的,古代的",而北京现在依然是首都,所以在这里应该用"历史悠久的")
Beijing is one of the oldest cities in China.
(北京并不是唯一的历史最悠久的城市,只是其中之一,这样才符合历史事实.)
Beijing has about 3000-year history.
(这样才是地道的英语表达)
It's in the north part of China.
(北京是在北方,不是东方)
The popoulation of Beijing is about 17 million. It's the second largest population in China.
(前文说北京是最大城市之一,这里说是第二大,逻辑不好,改成就人口来说,是第二大比较好.)
Beijing is a good place to visit.It's famous for the Great Wall and the Forbidden City. Beijing is both a modern and an international city.
(北京早已经是现代和国际城市,不是"is becoming".)
Now it is year of 2008. The 29th Olympic Games will be held in Beijing in August. Although the weather in August will be a little hot, it's attractive anyway.
(This year is 2008.典型的中式英语.已修改.八月的天气虽然比较热,但是还要提出其长处,不能只说热就完了.修改后的句子意思是"八月的天气有点热,尽管如此，北京还是一样迷人")

Answer 2

错倒是没什么错，只是反反复复都是那些东西，根本两三句话就能表达的东西，比如北京是古都，三千年历史，最老的城市之一都是一回事。要想写好英语必须用从句啊，小朋友。
至于奥运会和天气热不知道有什么关系？我不知道你老师要求什么水平，但在我看来不是一篇文章，而是啰嗦的一些句子，sorry，我只会踩人。

Answer 3

popoulation 单词错误

It's the seconed biggest cities in China 。cities要单数

imternational 单词错误

Answer 4

中式化的英语，是英文改错吗？

Answer 5

resume简历
而且定读[riˈzju:m]
而[rezju:mei]
常用
看比尔盖茨哈佛演讲上也用词
record录音
[riˈkɔ:d]动词
[ˈrekɔ:d]名词读音
读音别错了
名词
般用
recording
来做录制音像;
录音;
录像
另外tape也录音意思
动词录音
名词带子