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Inthecenterofthevividchart,WhatprovescommonknowledgeisthattheproportionofJapanesebran...
In the center of the vivid chart,What proves common knowledge is that the proportion of Japanese brands,from the year of 2008 to 2009,shrank by nearly 10%,in the Chinese market.On the contrary ,the number of Chinese brands,in the same period,rocketed to nearly 10%.The chart has revealed,as is known to us,a social phenomenon that cars made in China are supported by more and more citizens.
There exits a growing worldwide awareness that domestic products are supposed to select by Chinese.Not only are Chinese goods have perfect qualities,but also prove more cheaper than foreign goods.In addition,the more citizens in China are willing to purchase domestic goods,the more thriving China will be.Last but not least,choosing Chinese brands is significant,which helps technology become advanced as well as innovative.
In a few words,it is Chinese brands that win customer’s favor.In order to maintain the momentum of development,domestic cars ought to stick to their quality and learn experiences from Japanese car’s failure.Should not we argue that domestic cars will have delighted prospect in the near future? 展开
There exits a growing worldwide awareness that domestic products are supposed to select by Chinese.Not only are Chinese goods have perfect qualities,but also prove more cheaper than foreign goods.In addition,the more citizens in China are willing to purchase domestic goods,the more thriving China will be.Last but not least,choosing Chinese brands is significant,which helps technology become advanced as well as innovative.
In a few words,it is Chinese brands that win customer’s favor.In order to maintain the momentum of development,domestic cars ought to stick to their quality and learn experiences from Japanese car’s failure.Should not we argue that domestic cars will have delighted prospect in the near future? 展开
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写得不错,段落分明,格式规范,如果20分,最少可以得12-13分。
几处语法错误及不妥:
1. 第二段的by Chinese不妥,by没有必要啊(不是被动)。
2. 它下一句的倒装不对。
3. 比较级more cheaper不对。
4. thriving和innovative不准确。
5. 结尾的最后一句不妥。结尾是用两到三句重申第二部分的观点,上面没有提及的内容(哪怕是真的)不合适出现在这里。
几处语法错误及不妥:
1. 第二段的by Chinese不妥,by没有必要啊(不是被动)。
2. 它下一句的倒装不对。
3. 比较级more cheaper不对。
4. thriving和innovative不准确。
5. 结尾的最后一句不妥。结尾是用两到三句重申第二部分的观点,上面没有提及的内容(哪怕是真的)不合适出现在这里。
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谢谢您的指导。
请问那个不是国货应该被国人支持吗?所以不应该用by表被动吗还有那句倒装具体要怎么写呢?感谢!
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可是被动表现在哪里啊?
be supposed to并不是by的谓语啊,这个短语意思是认为或必须。。
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