Question

一篇英语作文，大家帮我看一下有没有错误，明天上交 谢谢

I have a friend. His name is Bpb. He usually gets up and gets dressed at about six thirty. Then he has his brakfast at seven o'clock. His school is not far away from his home. So he has much time to eat breakfast. Then he goes to school by bike at seven thirty. He takes a bike to get to school at seven forty. He has the first class at eight o'clock

Answer 1

基本上是正确的。。时态，单复数都用的很好！不过“His name is Bpb” Bpb应该是笔误吧Bob的吧“He usually gets up and gets dressed at about six thirty”这句话有点变捏，用了2个谓语“gets”这个没有必要。建议把gets dressed 删除了。另外，这是叙述文，重复用同一个表示“然后”的时间连接词不好，应尽量使文章表达丰富。建议可以吧后面“Then he goes to school by bike 。。”这里的then改成“after that”希望对你有帮助

Answer 2

应该还行吧，不过总觉得有些别扭，你把has much time to eat改成has enough time to eat

Answer 3

呵呵 感觉 还不错 语法 用的很犀利 没得问题

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确定没有问题？ 明天给老师发了有错误我就死了- -

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呵呵 真的没得问提啦 放心吧 要对自己h有信心 你的外语还是挺不错的 望采纳

Answer 4

Bob名字写错。has much time to eat那句，不如改成The time is enough for him to have his brekfast.
再下一句用的then，换成After that,以避免和第一个then重复，枯燥。倒数第二句啰嗦，改为It usually takes him ten minutes to get to school.

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辅作业上RIDE a bike 是必须用的词语 不用扣分 BOB是打错了

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那就把前面BY BKIE 去掉。否则前后句两次提及骑车，啰嗦，非中心内容没必要重复。英文贵在精炼

Answer 5

没有错误,我是English teacher

Answer 6

再Kjdhasopas

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