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天空中遨游的苍鹰，迎风飞翔，仰观宇宙之大，俯视物类之盛，何其壮哉！大海里游动的蓝鲸，吐珠喷玉，跃出欣赏外界之美，落入观览海底之盛，何其雄哉！悬崖上挺立的枯松，居高临下，经历烈日的蒸灼，忍受风雨的洗礼，何其悲哉！

苍鹰冲入蓝天，其环境不可谓不险，但在险境中它给自己勇气，于是它成就了自己的雄姿；蓝鲸跃出海面，其压力不可谓不小，但在困难中它给自己胆量，于是它画出了生命的曲线；枯松身居悬崖，其地势不可谓不高，但在断壁中它给自己信仰，于是它拥有了最美的身姿。它们给了自己一个拥抱，于是生命之花顿时绽放。

王羲之学书，在广袤平原中感受横的舒展，在深山古藤上感受竖的坚韧。墨池变黑，笔杆折断，烈日烘烤，寒风凛冽，他也遇到过困难，但是王羲之告诉自己要坚强，他给了自己一个鼓励，于是观察、体验，他的书法已不再是简单的笔画与结构。

孔子学琴，在反复弹奏中思考乐曲的奥妙，在乐曲声中领悟曲作者高尚的追求。手指出茧，琴弦崩断，旁人嘲笑，指法难跟，他也遇到过挫折，但是孔子告诉自己要坚强，他给了自己一个拥抱，于是思考、领悟，他的思想在音乐中升华。

李时珍学医，在质疑声中研读前人书典，在遍尝百草中验证真伪。药不奏效，病痛缠身，拔高涉远，草药男寻，他也遇到过无助，但是李时珍告诉自己要坚强，他给了自己一个拥抱，于是质疑、实践，他的仁心已超越医术本身。

没有月亮的清辉，一颗微微发亮的星星也能泛出引人瞩目的璀璨；没有雄鹰的矫健，一只娇小玲珑的蜗牛也能登上令人仰慕的高山；没有大海的汹涌，一弯曲折回环的小溪也能激荡起清越悠扬的鸣响。

朋友，给自己一个拥抱吧，你的世界也许会顿时春暖花开！

Answer 1

没有月亮的清辉，一颗微微发亮的星星也能泛出引人瞩目的璀璨；没有雄鹰的矫健，一只娇小玲珑的蜗牛也能登上令人仰慕的高山；没有大海的汹涌，一弯曲折回环的小溪也能激荡起清越悠扬的鸣响。 文章的立意是坚强与勇气，感觉这段放在文章里显得有些格格不入了些
希望采纳

Answer 2

你好，希望我的回答对你有所帮助！
School Group Visits to Paris

During the March Break, a group of senior students from Glenforest Secondary School visited Paris to study art.
The students of this group were( a) grade twelve from art class. The students in this class are talented and most of them won several different art awards. Recently, this class received a class project from their school. For this project, they needed to visit Le Louvre and draw Mona Lisa and other great art pieces. The Louvre Museum is a national museum of France, which contains many famous art pieces, such as Mona Lisa, and Venus de Milo.
Cindy Zhang, one of the students said excitedly, “This was my first time to visit to The Louvre Museum. The art pieces in the musuem are so beautiful, especially the Mona Lisa. The colour of this piece is so vivid. As I looked at Mona Lisa, I could feel her smiling at me. I want to thank my school for providing me a good opportunity to learn art.”
Anna Coovadia, the teacher of this class reported, “My students are very intelligent, so I wanted them to develop their skills. I’m very surprised that my students redrew the Mona Lisa so well, I can not tell the differences between the original painting and theirs. I think after this trip, they all learned something. This experience definitely provides benefits for their further art career.”
After this trip, the class created a slide show to showcase their experience in Paris. They helped junior students organize an art club, and they raised money for another trip like this. They encouraged students to participate in different art activities.

Answer 3

没有月亮的清辉，一颗微微发亮的星星也能泛出引人瞩目的璀璨；没有雄鹰的矫健，一只娇小玲珑的蜗牛也能登上令人仰慕的高山；没有大海的汹涌，一弯曲折回环的小溪也能激荡起清越悠扬的鸣响。 文章的立意是坚强与勇气，感觉这段放在文章里显得有些格格不入了些

Answer 4

哇，好厉害！ 写不出这样的文章诶