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我给你重写一遍。如果可以能追加点赏分么？
Helping each other makes the world wonderful.
(正文有两点我擅自修改了一下：1. 如果你不是讲话，就不要“HELLO EVERYONE”；没必要，没意思。 2. “I tried to my best to help tem with the member of the club” 什么意思我没看懂；故，重写时候就没写进去，但是我给你写的前后还是通顺的）
It is always nice to help others. As teachers have taught us in school ever since we were little, "by helping others we gain happiness to ourselves". In the society, it is also our place and our duty to help out others in need --- such as the elderly, the youngs, the sick, and the disabled. We help the old with everyday activities that are easy for us, we help the sick to become relatively more healthy, While the people who receive help feel warm inside, we as the helpers also feel a sense of achievement. Not only are we building a better society during the process, but in some cases, we might even form a friendly bond with the people we are helping! Then, what's stopping us from doing more to help those in need?
然后给你提一点意见，你总是写 "TO DO"， 比如说"WHY DO WE TO DO THAT?"；“TO 什么什么” 是一个很基本的动词，而在真正写句子的时候我们一般都不用“TO”。“WHY DO WE DO THAT？”才是正确的问句。这就是一个例子，你文中还有几句也有这个“TO”的错误，希望你能自己发现。加油！
Helping each other makes the world wonderful.
(正文有两点我擅自修改了一下：1. 如果你不是讲话，就不要“HELLO EVERYONE”；没必要，没意思。 2. “I tried to my best to help tem with the member of the club” 什么意思我没看懂；故，重写时候就没写进去，但是我给你写的前后还是通顺的）
It is always nice to help others. As teachers have taught us in school ever since we were little, "by helping others we gain happiness to ourselves". In the society, it is also our place and our duty to help out others in need --- such as the elderly, the youngs, the sick, and the disabled. We help the old with everyday activities that are easy for us, we help the sick to become relatively more healthy, While the people who receive help feel warm inside, we as the helpers also feel a sense of achievement. Not only are we building a better society during the process, but in some cases, we might even form a friendly bond with the people we are helping! Then, what's stopping us from doing more to help those in need?
然后给你提一点意见，你总是写 "TO DO"， 比如说"WHY DO WE TO DO THAT?"；“TO 什么什么” 是一个很基本的动词，而在真正写句子的时候我们一般都不用“TO”。“WHY DO WE DO THAT？”才是正确的问句。这就是一个例子，你文中还有几句也有这个“TO”的错误，希望你能自己发现。加油！
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