Question

谁能帮我改改这篇英语短文啊（如下，中文也有），我知道有许多错误和不通顺的地方。因为是用翻译器翻译的

帮帮忙吧，老师辛苦了，谢谢，感激不尽

The ninth art

With the rapid
development of high-tech. Electronic games have entered innumerable families
become one of the best ways to entertain people amateur leisure. And they have become
the ninth largest art after Painting, Sculpture, Architecture, Music, Literature,
Dance, Drama, Film and Television.

From the seventy s as
one of the oldest personal computer APPLE series launched eight bits in the
first batch of simple electronic game start young. For more than 20 years
developed into has hundreds of millions of gamers, independent new artistic
style. Electronic games have shown its strong vitality of art. People work
through the appreciation of the excellent game, not only can a deeper
understanding of self, and more comprehensive understanding of life.

The essence of
electronic game art is: "virtual reality". And Lu xun once said,not
have a powerful and unconstrained style like the spirit, have no big art. Electronic
games is fantastical than it has ever been a kind of art form. It showed an
unprecedented in the virtual "reality".
There is no gainsaying, many of the old man
still to electronic games in today's society. But, beyond all question, in the
21st century, it is the peak of game art.

第九艺术

随着高科技的突飞猛进，电子游戏已进入千家万户，成为人们业余休闲的最佳娱乐方式之一，也成为了，继绘画、雕刻、建筑、音乐、诗歌（文学）、舞蹈、戏剧、电影（影视艺术）之后人类的第九大艺术

从七十年代随着最古老的八位元个人电脑APPLE系列推出而出现的第一批简单的电子游戏雏作开始，二十多年来发展成为拥有亿万游戏迷的独立的新型艺术样式，电子游戏已向世人显示了其强大的艺术生命力。人们通过欣赏（游玩）优秀的电子游戏作品，不但能更深刻地认识了自我，也更全面地认识了人生。

电子游戏艺术的本质是：“虚拟的真实”，鲁迅先生也曾说过：“非有天马行空似的大精神，即无大艺术的产生！”而电子游戏则天马行空的超过了以往任何一种艺术形态，表现出一种虚拟中前所未有的“真实性”。

不可否认，当今社会上许多中老人仍对电子游戏持有异议，但是，毫无疑问，21世纪，正是游戏艺术的巅峰时期.
好吧，是我自己写的
语法不好，写了好久
我说我用翻译器的意思是说不要用翻译器来忽悠我啊
谢谢
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Answer 1

第九艺术
The Ninth Art

随着高科技的突飞猛进，电子游戏已进入千家万户，成为人们业余休闲的最佳娱乐方式之一，也成为了，继绘画、雕刻、建筑、音乐、诗歌（文学）、舞蹈、戏剧、电影（影视艺术）之后人类的第九大艺术
With the rapid development of high-technology, electronic games have entered into millions of households, and become one of people's most-like entertainment. They have also become human's ninth largest art following painting, sculpture, architecture, music, poetry(literature), dance, drama, movie(video art).

从七十年代 随着最古老的八位元个人电脑APPLE系列 推出而出现的第一批简单的电子游戏雏作开始，二十多年来发展成为拥有亿万游戏迷的独立的新型艺术样式，电子游戏已向世人显示了其强大的艺术生命力。人们通过欣赏（游玩）优秀的电子游戏作品，不但能更深刻地认识了自我，也更全面地认识了人生。
Since the seventies of last century, the launch of the 8-bit APPLE PC series marked the first batch of simple electronic games. In recent twenty years' time, electronic games have been developed into an independant art with hundreds of millions of game fans. Electronic games showed its strong vitality of the arts to the world. Through appreciation(play) of the outstanding electronic games, people not only gained deeper understanding of themselves, but alsohad a more complete understanding of life.

电子游戏艺术的本质是：“虚拟的真实”，鲁迅先生也曾说过：“非有天马行空似的大精神，即无大艺术的产生！”而电子游戏则天马行空的超过了以往任何一种艺术形态，表现出一种虚拟中前所未有的“真实性”。

The essence of electronic game art is : "Virtual Reality". Mr. Lu Xun once said that : "Without the great fancifel-spirit, it can never generate large art!" Yet electronic game is so fanciful that it surpasses any other type of arts, with a never-before unprecedented authenticity from abstract virtuality.

不可否认，当今社会上许多中老人仍对电子游戏持有异议，但是，毫无疑问，21世纪，正是游戏艺术的巅峰时期.
It cannot be denied that in today's society, many elderly people still held objections to electronic games. However, there is no doubt that in the 21st century it is the pinnacle of the game art period.

Answer 2

With the rapid development of high-tech electronic games have access to millions of households, one of the people's hobby entertainment, has become, following the painting, sculpture, architecture, music, poetry (literature), dance, theater, film human ninth largest art (video art)
From the seventies with the oldest eight bit PC apple series launched the first batch of simple electronic games young began twenty years developed into a new independent art style with hundreds of millions of game fans, electronic games show the world its strong vitality of the arts. People through appreciation (play) outstanding electronic game works, not only a deeper understanding of self, but also a more complete understanding of life.
Electronic game the essence of art: "Virtual Reality", Mr. Lu Xun once said that: "Non-the fanciful like spirit, that is, without the generation of large art!" Electronic game more than ever an art abstract form, showing a virtual unprecedented authenticity.
No denying that today's society, many elderly people still held electronic games objections, however, there is no doubt that in the 21st century, it is the pinnacle of the game art period.

追问

对不对啊，不是用的翻译器吧

追答

那你可以放到翻译器里面。。。翻成中文看对不对。。。

追问

我的要求就是不要用翻译器啊

追答

对的。。。应该。。。

Answer 3

The ninth art
With the rapid development of high-tech，e-games have entered innumerable families, and have become one of the best ways for people to entertain in one’s leisure time. What’s more, they have become the ninth major art form after painting, sculpture, architecture, music, literature, dance, drama, film and television art.
Starting from the first simplest e-games in the1970s that came along with the oldest 8-bit personal computer APPLE series, e-games have, over 20 years, developed into an independent new art form with billions of crazy game fans, showing powerful artistic vitality to the whole world. Through playing or enjoying excellent e-games, people not only understand themselves better but also get a more comprehensive understanding of human life.
The essence of e-game art is: "virtual reality". Lu Xun once said, “No unconstrained spirit like horses flying across skies, no great art.” However, e-games have surpassed any other art form, showing an unprecedented "reality" in the virtual world.
There is no denying that many of the old or middle-aged men in today's society still object to electronic games. But, beyond all question, the 21st century is surely the L'ora di punta for e-game art.

Answer 4

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