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雅思作文求批改

原文见第一个回答中的附件。 拜托大伙帮忙给改下，指出哪里需要改进，具体说下那里存在语法结构等问题。谢谢

Answer 1

1、in recent decades years改in recent decades/years
2、is getting increasingly serious than ever改is getting increasingly serious或者is more serious than ever
3、I personally think that改：直接Personally，简明扼要，有水准，有时间废话感觉不好
4、there are three main factors contribute to this serious issue改there are three main factors contributing to this serious issue
5、 As regard the first改Regarding+n，建议你用Firstly等等，其他的一些我忘了，不故弄悬殊
6、Lots of people driving from home to work frequently instead of taking buses and tubes改没有谓语，instead of 是状语Lots of people drive from home to work frequently instead of taking buses and tubes
7 Although some people explained改时态问题，一般现在时，explain
8、Consequently, loads of SO2 and SO from the exhausted gas would be spread into the air.改SO2 and SO不是学理科的都看不懂，sulfide多好，就是硫化物
9、 As we all know, that there are a large amount of poison water are produced when producing products.改有逗号就不用that，没逗号就用that，小问题，要注意，water are produced定语从句没主语，As we all know, that there are a large amount of poison water which are produced when producing products.

你的词汇量很好，语言表达和思维套路都很好，就是结构方面，提升一下，技巧提高，肯定能得高分
还有一些可能没看到吧，看了好久，类，呼呼

Answer 2

题目：Today environmental pollution has been increasingly seriously.
Discuss the reasons why environment is polluted and give some solutions to it.

Eco-system, as a place where we human beings rely on, is being destroyed heavily in recent decades years. Meanwhile , the environmental pollution is getting increasingly serious than ever before especially air pollution and water pollution, which do certain impacts on both human race and other creatures.

I personally think that there are three main factors contribute to this serious issue. As regard the first, traffic overloads, which is commonly seen on the modern society. Lots of people driving from home to work frequently instead of taking buses and tubes. Although some people explained that driving private cars is both convenient and feasible for themselves, it does make heavy traffic jam and plenty of exhausted air to the public at the same time. Consequently, loads of SO2 and SO from the exhausted gas would be spread into the air. On top of that transportation overloads, polluted water from all kinds of factories can be another cause. As we all know, that there are a large amount of poison water are produced when producing products. Thus, those polluted liquid might mix with pure river water and damage the water quality in a certain degree, which also do harm to eco-system. Worse still, lacking relevant environment friendly information also leads to the increasing pollution, since fewer and fewer people are too awkward to do something environment friendly. It is exact these points that lead to the terrible environmental pollution.

However, there are still some tactics that both the public and government can take in order to create an environment friendly world. Firstly, as for the air pollution, that relevant traffic department are supposed to set a series of rules to decrease the number of cars. And meanwhile, residents have responsibility to discipline themselves and attempt to take public transportations more often. As regards the water pollution the best solution is not setting rules or laws to discipline factories but delivering them feasible means to purify polluted water. Improving the proportion of environment education is the third solution, because only the public are aware of the importance of eco-system can they take environment friendly into account, and more individuals would help maintain our own eco environment.

All in all, even though the serious environmental pollution issue has badly influenced both human and other creatures’ living quality, building confidence and taking effective strategies will be a worth trying thing for ourselves.
就是这篇作文了，帮忙看下吧。谢谢

Answer 3

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