Question

高一英语 帮忙改一下作文里的错句

Answer 1

小编的建议如下：

一    错误

1. 自信的名词是convinence，你写的convinent是其形容词 自信的

2. 第一段最后一句表达错误，应该改为But the way  lets students  far  from  developping their ability

3. 应该的正确写法是should

   
   

   
   

二  建议

1. 开头太过于简单。

2. 过渡不是很明显

3. 词用的太差劲

4. 字迹差

5. 没有优美句子

一下为小编自己写的，虽然不好，仅供参考

In  my  opinion , during  the   development  of  china  , our  students  is    under  the   heavier  pressure  .Everyday ,students must finish  their  homework that  like  a mountain.As a result of  it, many  students  begin  to  search  answers  for  more  time  to  paly  and  sleep .

Though  we can  get  a  lot  of  new  knowledge ，it  also  results  that  students  dependent on internet .More and more students  refuse  to  think  questions  ,but  only  to  search the  ways to  all  problems  .It  is  computer  that  replaces  the  human  brain . 

So,it  is  time  for  us  to  take  action to  solve  the  problem  . Only  can  we  start it  with  ourselves  ，our  human  become  more  and  more  powerful .   

望采纳！

Answer 2

我把你的作文改了一下。
Students always （我猜你是想用always（总是）而错用了almost（几乎））have a lot of pressure in finishing their homework.（我认为pressure和homework应该是两方面的原因，将两者联系在一起有些强硬且不够字数）
For one thing（这个搭配估计高一没学到，中文意思是一方面...另一方面...你可以改用序数词），in this way ，I think，（前面两个是插入语，可随意删减，不影响结构，但要注意句子意思）students can save time and solve problems conviently.For another thing,depending on this way too much will make students lose their ability.
So（last不用改为lastly，这里没有last）,in my poinion,students should not go online to search for the answer too much.Contrarily（相反地）,they should try their best to work out the problems first.（结尾有些仓促和随便，可以修改一下，多添些内容）

Answer 3

这个almost我总觉得有一些奇怪

追答

第二句可以改成This is such an convenient way for students to do their homework that ....

第三句But in this way students may also lose their ability.

lastly

in my opinion,

We should try not to take the approach to thinking or doing homework