Question

帮忙看看这篇文章有没有语法错误

看看有没有用语不当或语法错误 我是初二的，所以不要改得太难哟！！

Today, I tell you a true story about two beggars and me. One day, the beggars stopped me and asked me for money. The beggars are two old women with dirty hair, which smelled sourness and I must hold my my nose. They said with a poor voice: Oh, kind girl, Could you gave us some (a few) money ? we came from Sichuan and we have not ate anything for two days, just only two yuan for two pieces of bread.
I thought it maybe true, so I gave them two yuan.
But two weeks late, I walked on the same raod and stopped by the beggars again. They said in same poor voice: Oh, kind girl, Could you gave us some (a few) money ? we came from Sichuan and we have not ate anything for two days, just only two yuan for two pieces of bread. I surprised and said : Oh , you asked money again from me
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Answer 1

sourness改为sour
must hold my nose改为had to hold my breath
gave改为give，不可用a few
came from Sichuan 改为come from Sichuan
have not ate anything改为have not had anything to eat
just only two yuan for two pieces of bread前边加we need
maybe改为may be
late改为later
They said in same poor voice中的same前加the
Could you gave 改为Could you give
其他同上
I surprised 中间加got
you asked money again from me改为you are asking me for money again。

Answer 2

I will tell you....或者I'd like to tell you
Could you give us ..... not gave
we have not eat not ate
two weeks later not late
I was surprised
You asked money from me again 这样说起来舒服点

Answer 3

重新帮你翻了一遍 有些语法错误
Today, I tell you a true story about two beggars and I. One day, a beggar stopped me, asking me for money. A beggar is two old woman with a dirty hair, smell, I must keep a my nose. They say, with a poor voice: oh, good girl, you can give us some (a few money? We come from sichuan and we didn't eat anything, just only two yuan of two pieces of bread.
I think maybe it is correct, then I gave them two yuan.
But two weeks later, I walk in the same raod, stopping at the beggar. They say, in the same poor voice: oh, good girl, you can give us some (few) money? We come from sichuan and we didn't eat anything, just only two yuan of two pieces of bread. I was surprised to ask: oh, you want the money from me

Answer 4

Today, I want to tell you a true story about two beggars and me. One day, the beggars stopped me and asked me for money. The beggars were two old women with dirty hair, which smelled sourness a. so I had to hold my nose. They said in a poor voice," Oh, kind girl, Could you gave us some (a few) money ? we came from Sichuan and we have not eaten anything for two days, just only two yuan for two pieces of bread. "
I thought it might be true, so I gave them two yuan.
two weeks later, I walked on the same road and was stopped by the beggars again. They said in the same poor voice,"Oh, kind girl, Could you gave us some (a few) money ? we came from Sichuan and we have not eaten anything for two days, just only two yuan for two pieces of bread. "I surprised and said ," Oh , you had asked for money from me."

Answer 5

Today, I[will]tell you a true story about two beggars and me. One day, the beggars stopped {me} and asked me for[some] money. The beggars are（were） two old women with dirty hair, which smelled sourness and I must(had to) hold(cover) my {my} nose. They said with a[same] poor voice: Oh, kind girl, Could you gave(give) us some （用some） money ? we came from Sichuan and we have not ate anything for two days, [we need ]just only two yuan for two pieces of bread.
I thought it maybe(might be) true, so I gave them two yuan.
But two weeks late(er), I walked on the same raod(road) and[was] stopped by the beggars again. They said in same poor voice: Oh, kind girl, Could you gave(give) us some (a few) money ? we came from Sichuan and we have not ate anything for two days, [we need]just only two yuan for two pieces of bread. I [was]surprised and said : Oh , you ask me again for money!

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