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Last summer i spent a two-week vacation at my aunt's .She lives in the small mountain village,with a river winded its course nearby.Early one morining,i went swimming in the river, where some woman were washing clothes.I found the most favorable point.I was just about to jump into the river while there came a cry，“Help Help”I looked on the direction of the cry.I found that a little boy had been fallen into the river.I rush over without delay,jumped into the water swam quickly towards the boy.Holding on to him over the water,he struggled to the bank.
At last,the boy was saved and his parents came up and were thankful to me.
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Answer 1

Last summer I spent a two-week vacation at my aunt's .She lives in a small mountain village,with a river winded its course nearby.Early one morining,i went swimming in the river, where some woman were washing clothes.I found the most favorite point.I was just about to jump into the river while there came a cry，“Help Help”I looked on the direction of the cry.I found that a little boy had fallen into the river.I rushed over without delaying,jumped into the water swam quickly towards the boy.Holding on to him over the water,he struggled to the bank.
At last,the boy was saved and his parents came up and were thankful to me.
改了几个 这是改完后的

Answer 2

1.删掉was
was系be动词为被动语态，不合适
语义不通
2.lot后加of
a
lot
of
为惯用法
3.included改为including
included意思为
包括的
形容词性，including意思为
包括
为介词，结构符合
4.not改为no
此为语感...太简单，反而不会解释...一般not用于句尾吧
5.去掉and
连词重复了
一般句中可和and连用
6.shouted改为shouts
一般现在时单数第三人称...
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