Question

英语作文，求大神帮我改改

Nowadays,we often see many immoral behavior in public.for example , throw rubbish around,pit on the floor,eat food in the bus.once i was in the library,i have done my math work,suddenly someone's phone rang ,it broke my thought i feel very angry
Many immoral behavior have bad influence,they can make people don't trust others and make many clash.and if happened in other country ,it could our country become unpopularity.and if child learn it ,child will go ill in thought.
So we should change it ,we should teach child what thing is right.And we can punish some immoral behavior.And we can speech about this teach don't do that.

Answer 1

1.注意句首大写 2.eat food---eat就行 没有这么说的 可以用have food done my math work---homework
it broke my thought i feel very angry----and 这是两句话 feel---felt
,it could our country become unpopularity没有实意动词 could let/make
if child learn it ,child will go ill in thought.------if a child/children learn(s) it ,he/they will go ill in thought.
So we should change it ,------改为句号
what thing is right----what is right 就行
And we can punish some immoral behavior.----不是惩罚不礼貌的举止 是惩罚人 不能这么说
.And we can speech about this teach don't do that.----We can teach them not to do like that
3.不要用太多重复词 and it this that
4.该省的省 不要赘余

Answer 2

Nowadays,there are many Uncivilized behaviors in public.
once i was doing my math work in the library,suddenly someone's phone rang ,it broke my thought which i feel very angry at.
As we know,these bad behaviors usually lead to negative influence,they may make people don't have enough confidence in him or her and cause many clash.and if it happened in other countries ,will make our country unpopular.and that will have bad affect on children if they learn it.
So we have the duty to forbid it,and tell kids which is right and what is allowed to do.What's more,the government should punish these people whose behaviors are unallowed.And we can give a speech about it to educate people.