Question

求达人帮忙看看英语作文，改错。

A thank-you letter
Dear Andy:
I really do not know how to express my gratitude for your help. You help me to pass the Advanced Mathematics exam, thank you so much.
About one year ago. When I prepared for the higher mathematics, I do not know how to start it, I have no idea for it, my Mathematics foundation is very poor, I was so despair of the exam. I afraid I would not pass the exam. At that time, I met you in the internet chat room, and you taught me how to solve the math problems, and many higher mathematics knowledge, it very helpful for me.
At last, I passed the exam, at the same time , i though I could not pass the exam if you had not help me, thank you so much.

最后一句是虚拟语气，如果没有你的帮助就不能通过考试，不知道这样写对不对。
全文改错，我的英语不好，这是作业，唯有靠作业拿点分。。。请教各位了，另外老师要求120字，而且要拿高分的话。。。感觉有点那啥。。。。顺道如果有高人，能借此教教我写英语作文吗？谢谢了。

Answer 1

直接在楼主的文章上改了：
Dear Andy:
I really do not know how to express my gratitude for your help. It's you who helped me pass the Advanced Mathematics exam, thank you so much.
About one year ago, when I was preparing for the advanced mathematics, I did not know how to start it, I had no idea about it because my Mathematics foundation was very poor. I was very despaired of the exam. I was afraid that I would not pass the exam. At that time, I met you in the internet chat room, and you taught me how to solve the math problems and lots of advanced mathematics knowledge, which was very helpful for me.
At last, I passed the exam. At the same time , I think I could not have passed the exam if you had not helped me, thank you so much!

最后一句还可以说：I could never have passed the exam without your help.

Answer 2

Dear Andy,
I'm writing this letter with deep gratitution to thank you for your help.
Last year when I was studying Advanced Mathematics alone it was really a desperate situation.I even didn't know where to start with. Although you are just someone I met on the Internet, and people have been losing confidence over Internet relationship all the time, I do feel that you are a friend in deed. I wouln't pass this exam without your help. Now I even regain my confidence in this subject. Thank you for accompaning me in the hardest time.

your sincerely,
XXX

先不说英文，你的文章翻译成中文不觉得逻辑都是乱糟糟的么。信息只有“你帮了我”，“我很谢谢你”，几句话翻过来倒过去地讲。而且写作文就当成真事来写阿，你感谢别人的时候还会把整个事情的来龙去脉都重复一遍么，明显是给批卷老师交代剧情嘛。
想要作文写得好只有多练，怎么练呢，一句话写到自己满意为止。而怎么样算是可以满意的句子呢？那就又要牵扯到你的阅读面了，地道的英文文章看得多，自然就能感觉出来一个句子写得好还是不好。
另外写作水平不光是语法对不对的问题，大家中国话都说得对但是作文水平还是高低不一这是为什么呢？试着用更加高一点的眼光来分析英语作文大抵也能对提高水平有帮助

Answer 3

A thank-you letter

Dear Andy,

Now I really do not know how to express my gratitude to you for your help. Thank you ever so much for helping me to pass the Advanced Mathematics exam,
About one year ago, when I prepared for the higher mathematics exam, I did not know how to start it. My Mathematics foundation was so poor that I felt despaired of the exam. I afraid I would not pass the exam. At that time, I met you in chatting room on the internet, and you taught me how to solve the math problems, as well as much higher mathematics knowledge. It was very helpful for me.
At last, I passed the exam. It could be said that at that time, I would not pass the exam if you had not helped me. Thank you again, dear Andy.

Sincerely yours,
XXX

Answer 4

有拼写错误，看不懂你的意思啊 是要全文改错还是就最后一句

Answer 5

给你一篇我写的 你看看
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