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In some cuntries,teenagers have jobs while they are still student,so,lots of peoples ave different opinion.
someone think it is bad,because you have part-time job effect you school work,but some people think that make part-time job is well,and I support part-time job when you are a student..

First,work part time will improve your ability,this includes your deal with affairs and social work,so you will get abundant soical experence.It is one hand.On the other hand,the social work experence will help your university life,for example,you will take it easy when you deal with a diffcult problem.of cause,as a student,we should study hard,on this permise,we're work part time will improve to our.

second,I think students shoun't seek some a lot of work of diffcult,because it myay be a burden to you,this s dreadful!so if you have part time,you can becme a part-timetutor or work in the library or shops..

All in all,as long as it doesn't affect the school work,I agree and support students have part-time jobs.

Answer 1

In some cuntries,teenagers have jobs while they are still student,so,lots of people have different opinion.
someone think it is bad,because you have part-time job effect you school work,but some people think that take a part-time job is good,and I support have a part-time job when you are a student..

At first,work part time will improve your ability,this includes your deal with affairs and social work,so you will get abundant soical experence.On the other hand,the social work experence will help your university life,for example,you will take it easy when you deal with a diffcult problem.of cause,as a student, the premise is we should study hard

secondly,I think students should not seek some a lot of work of diffcult,because it may be a burden to you,this is dreadful!so if you have part time,you can becme a part-time tutor or work in the library or shops..

All in all,without affecting the study work,I agree and support students have part-time job

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Answer 2

In some cuntries,teenagers have part- jobs when they are still student, towards which lots of people have different opinions.
someone think it is bad,because if teenagers have part-time jobs, it effect their school work. But some people think that doing part-time job is good,and I support to teenagers do part-time jobs when they are students..

Firstly,doing part-time job will improve your ability,which means teenagers' capacity of dealing with affairs and social work will be strenghthened.So teenagers will get abundant soical experence.What's more,the social work experence will help teenagers adpat themselves to university life,for example,teenagers will take it easy when theyhave to deal with diffcult problems.Of cause,as a student,they should study hard,on this permise,they are doing part time jobs foe the improvement of themselves.

Secondly,I think students don't need to seek jobs which are too diffcult to them, because it myay be a burden to them,this s dreadful! If you have spare time,you can become a part-time tutor or work in the library or shops..

All in all,as long as it doesn't affect the school work,I agree and support students have part-time jobs.

Answer 3

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In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think this is a good idea?

First of all, the most important thing teenagers, especially college student, is studying. Your job must steal much time to study from you, and it make your grade worse than ever before. A famous scientist have shown that student who have any jobs don't have enough time to do their homework and their grade is worse than student who don't have jobs. It is necessaty for college student whose family are poor to earn enough money for living. However, except for the case, student should study hard.

Some indeed argue that jobs teach us lots of sighnificant things we can never learn only to study in school or our home. It is instrumental in finding our real dream and broaden and deepen our value. I never deny it, but we can broaden our sense of value or find our dream to talk with our friends or teachers in school during class. In my case, I develop my sense of value much better to discuss the topic our teacher gave us with my classmate. It was very meaningful and stimulating for me.

In my opinion, the fact that in some countries the young people are allowed to work and study at the same time is really great. It provides a lot of benefits for the students. For them, it can be very helpful in their process of becoming more responsible. Having to divide time between work and study can improve the student’s ability of taking decisions and the way they take advantage of the time they have available. Such things maybe can be learned at the university, but in my opinion the best way to acquire that knowledge is the self-experience.