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麻烦大家帮我改改，这是我英语作文的草稿，谢谢！

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开耐桥头锋物：银亩液Everybody has his or her own dreams that they want to achieve. Thus,having a ideal life is my dream.

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你要不等一下，我给你重写一遍？

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好好

你能帮我也看看我的错句吗？谢谢

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一句话只有一个be动词记住

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用非谓语了

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用词要特深还是浅？

你几年级？

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高一

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👌我高二

你是男生？

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是啊

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还是女的

我马上给你写

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你男的女的啊？

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妹纸

我去帮你写了，你等我

别睡

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好

好的

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看得清吗

My Dream
There is no denying that everyone has his or her own dream, so do I. My dream is really simple which is to have an ideal life.

I believe that ideal life will makes me to feel happy and satisfied. First of all, I’d like to finish and hand in an application for the military school since I hope that I can be a military officer after I’v graduated. The reason for why I want to be a military officer is that the uniforms for military are awesome so that I can not stop thinking about them, plus military sounds really cool and attracted to me. Despite the military, whenever I have any money, I will buy two cars, one is sports car and the other one is pick-up truck. Because since I was a child, I got crazy in cars badly. For the rest of the money, I would like to send it to my family, including my parents, my wife as well as my children, plus I will also stay with my family forever.

Lastly, I want to travel to other countries with my family in the future since I love traveling. Do you think that my dream will come true?

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谢谢谢谢

学姐

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ould give pleasure othe

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everyone has dreams

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and my dream is living a ideal life

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还有吗？

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be admited to

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你确定吗？

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admited应该用被动

具体是to还是by我记不清了

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你帮我好好看看嘛

谢谢了

错句你给我说说，那里错了

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give sth to sb

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也有give sb sth

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嗯，看见了，刚没看到后面

accompany my family

陪伴我的家人

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