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One day I was about to go outside to play when I saw my mother being busy with several housework at the same time. She looked so tired, and I felt guilty, Therefore I made a determination to share housework with her. I was about to wash the clothes when my friend called me up and asked me to play with her. I told her that I would go on the condition that completing my washing. Then I go on washing ,Only then did I realized it was such a tiring thing to wash clothes, and how tired my mother was. While my mother not only worked outside but also took the responsibility of our housework inside, she never complaint to us. After washing I felt tired though ,my mother praised me ,and said that I was a good child. I felt happy.
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One day I was about to go outside to play when I saw my mother being busy with several housework at the same time. She looked so tired, and I felt guilty, Therefore I made a determination to share housework with her. I was about to wash the clothes when my friend called me up and asked me to play with her. I told her that I would go on the condition that completing my washing. Then I go on washing ,Only then did I realized it was such a tiring thing to wash clothes, and how tired my mother was. While my mother not only worked outside but also took the responsibility of our housework inside, she never complaint to us. After washing I felt tired though ,my mother praised me ,and said that I was a good child. I felt happy.
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