谁帮我修改一下英语作文
However, many students don't agree with this kind of behavior. First they think it is immoral behavior. Second, this kind of behavior will destroy the friendship between classmates. Third, left a bad impression to others.
Weighing up these two arguments, I prefer the second. I hold the view that everyone to do things for others. Besides, we should not to be late. If everyone harbor the idea, I do believe that, we can happy learning. 展开
第二句 so 换成 however。第二句与第一句显然不是因果关系,所以不能用so。 这里有个轻微的转折含义,虽然占位是个普遍现象,但是不同的人对此有不同的看法。
此外 whether we should。。。。。。你的句子缺少主语,此外地道的用法不太常用 or not
some people think that it is convenient for their study.
Besides, they can sit close to their friends and study together. 上句的some people显然是第三人称,所以要用they. 朋友当然都是熟悉的人,不要赘述了。
but some students worry that there will be no seats available if they come late.
However, many students don't agree to this kind of behavior
agree with sb 同某人看法一致 agree to sth 同意某种观点或安排等等。
an immoral behavior
列举多用 firstly secondly thirdly
destroy 是彻底摧毁的意思,语意很重的,要慎用。建议用 harm 或 influence
it will leave a bad impression on others. 介词要用on
I hold the view that everyone ought to do things for others. ought to do sth 应该做某事,语气也很委婉。
should not be late。should 是情态动词,与动词原形连用。
If we all harbor the idea, I do believe that, we can learn happily.
主句主语是 we,if 条件句应该一致。此外, can 是情态动词,与动词原形连用. 副词修饰happily 动词 learn。
你的句子有些没有主语,你要注意。写好一个句子就去分析以下看看是否完整,结构是否合理。
In college, reserving a seat is a common phenomenon. So different people have different views about whether or not should reserve a seat. Some people think that it is convenient for their study. Also they can have friends to study next to them. And some students worry about
coming late without seats.
However, many students don't agree with this kind of behavior. First, they think it is immoral
behavior. Second, this kind of behavior will destroy the friendship between classmates. Third, it gaves a bad impression to others.
Weighing up these two arguments, I prefer the second. My point is: Everyone should do things
for others. Besides, we should not be late. If everyone harbor the idea, I do believe that we will be happy in our college study.