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英语作文批改。有不足之处尽管指出，鄙人一定虚心接受

网购已成为很多人青睐的一种现代购物形式。请你以“OnlineShopping”为题，根据以下三个要点，分三段写一篇100字左右的英语短文，谈谈网购现象及你的看法或建议
1.越来越多的人喜欢在网上购买商品
2.网上购物可能存在的问题(如：假货；货物损坏；不易退换)
3.你的看法或建议
注意：1.词数：100左右；2.可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
3.参考词汇：网店店主Internetshopping provider 假货fake goods
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The reason why Internet is popular with isthat with technology developing. Especially online shopping so fashionnowadays. Because online shopping have some new functions. We gradually arefond of it.
Here are some advantages.To begin with, itcan bring us more convenience ,we need not go to the mall to buy some things,such as clothes and shoes Next, It costs less money, so we select it. Besides,we can keep in touch with Internet shopping provider wherever we are .How helpful it is ! What’sworse,,we might buy some fake goods. So, some people prefer to go to the mall ratherthan online shopping .Besides, some young people in favour of online shopping.They like staying in the home and don’t go out .This is the other side of it
In a word , I support the first view . Butif you become addicted in online shopping, it will influence your life. As longas online shopping properly, it makes life better.

Answer 1

With the development of technology, Internet shopping becomes more and more popular.
"The reason why Internet is popular with isthat with technology developing.---the reason why Internet is so popular is because the technology has developed a lot."
"Especially online shopping so fashion nowadays.---Online shopping has become especially fashionable nowadays"
"Because online shopping have some new functions.--- has some new features. "
"Here are some advantages.---here are some advantages of online shopping."
"To begin with, itcan bring us more convenience ,we need not go to the mall to buy some things,such as clothes and shoes---First of all, it makes our life much more convenient as we don't need to go to the mall to shop anymore. We can just sit at home and make orders."
"Next, It costs less money, so we select it. ---Second, it costs less money and that's why we use it. "
"What’sworse,,we might buy some fake goods. ---However, there are also some bad things about online shopping. For example, we might sometimes get fake goods."
"So, some people prefer to go to the mall ratherthan online shopping ---So some people prefer to go shopping in the mall rather than on the internet."
"Besides, some young people in favour of online shopping.---What's more, Some young people are addicted to online shopping and refuse to go out."
" become addicted in --become addicted to"
"it will influence your life.---it will have bad influence on your life."
"As longas online shopping properly, it makes life better.---As long as people can manage online shopping properly, it will make our lives much better."