Question

帮忙改改英语自我介绍，马上就比赛了！

Hi, everybody, my name is ***. I’m 14 years old. I’m an active girl in my school. I have many hobbies, such as singing, swimming, but my favourite is English. English bring the wonderful fun to my life. Perhaps someone thinks it’s difficult to study well, but I like it. I dream of being an translator when I grow up. It isn’t a day dream. I know it’s difficult to succeed and I have to double to effort. But I want to try. I will do my best. I believe that if you try your best, everything can be done well.
帮着改改啊，100个词左右，初中水平！

Answer 1

Hi, everybody, my name is ***. I’m 14 years old. I’m an active girl in my school. I have many hobbies, such as singing, swimming, but my favourite is English.(这里可以换一下句型，如果是比赛用的，连着N个短句都是以I开头的，听起来有点，IIII）
改：Hi, everybody, my name is ***. I’m 14 years old. In my school, I am an active girl who has many hobbies, such as singing, swimming and so on. English is my favourite. It brings a lot wonderful fun to my life. Some people may consider that English is difficult to learn, but I don't agree. I like English, and I am willing to become a professional translator in the future. I believe it isn't a day-dream. Maybe my dream is not easy to achieve, but I would like to pay double effort to realize my dream. I want to have a try and I will do my best! I believe that if you try your best, every thing can be done well and every dream will be realized!
（改了一些词，加了一些句子，比较口语化，适用于开场，希望你能采纳。）

Answer 2

Hi, everybody, my name is ***. I’m 14 years old. I’m an active girl in my school. I have many hobbies, such as singing, swimming, but my favourite is English. English brings the wonderful fun to my life. Perhaps someone thinks it’s difficult to study well, but I like it. I dream of being an translator when I grow up. It isn’t a day dream. I know it’s difficult to succeed and I have to double to effort. But I want to try. I will do my best. I believe that if you try your best, everything can be done most.

Answer 3

第二行 but my favourite one is English, 一定要加one，否则就是大错误。
还有，i dream of being an translator 不是an 是a，补充一点，translator和interpreter是有区别的，前者是翻译者就是笔译，后者是口译者，你表达的是你想说的吗？
其他的大家都说了。
现在初中英文水平好高啊，最后祝你《口若悬河，“译”统天下》

Answer 4

brings
a translator