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Everyone has a dream,I have a dream,too.I'm going to be an enjineer when I grow up.I think enjineer is an interesting job.As an enjineer,I can build many buildings and many bridges.I inteed to practice building architecture after I finish senior high school and collage.But is not easy to be an enjineer .I 'm going to good study all my subjects.And I'm going to stuby math more hard.I'm also going to exercise to keep fit so that I can have a strong body.I hope my dream will come true.

Answer 1

第一行：
”.I'm going to be an enjineer“ 最后那个词拼错了，应该是engineer， 而且最好改成I want to be an engineer，既然是你的梦想，那就是你想要做什么，用 is going to 有点奇怪的说
第二行：
”As an enjineer,I can build many buildings and many bridges.“ 这句话逻辑有问题，会显得你其实对engineer 一点都不了解。难道所有的工程师都是造房子和桥的？那Bio engineer 是做什么的？建议你像个更好的原因

第四行：
”I 'm going to good study all my subject“ 把good study all my subjec换成 excel in all my subjects, 你的那句有语法错误

”And I'm going to stuby math more hard“ 首先，study 拼错了，不知道是不是你粗心。其次，这句话很怪，是想说要更加努力地学数学吗？最好换成I'm going to put even more efforts in studying Math

Answer 2

Everyone has dream,I have a dream,too.
I'm going to be an engineer when I grow up.I think engineer would be an interesting job.
To be an engineer,I could build many buildings and many bridges.
I intend to get major in architecture after I finished senior high school and college.
But is not easy to be an engineer .I 'm going to study all my subjects better.
And I'm going to stuby math more hard.I'm also going to exercise seriously to keep fit so that I can have a strong body.
I hope my dream will come true.