Question

帮我看看我自己翻译的几个句子有什么不妥当的地方

中翻英：
3. 这个小男孩独自一人时往往按饿，因为他不会做饭
The boy is always hungry when he is alone due to his weakness of cooking
4. 看到老人奄奄一息，邻居们一刻也没有耽误，马上请来医生。
The neirbourghs called for the doctors in time when seeing the ill elder
5. 衡量一个学生的学习不能只看他的分数，还要看他解决问题的能力。
Measuring students should be balanced between their achievement and abilities of soloving problems.
6. 穿这件衣服看起来很合身，好像是专门为你做的一样。
The coat is very suitable for you which seems that it is just made for you
7. 创造的愿望是很重要的。如果我们只是模仿，那就很难发展新事物了。
Creating is very important. We will hard develop on the way of imitation
8. 消息在传达给军官之前就在士兵只传开了。
The news had been spreaded over among the soldiers before the officer got it
9. 我认为世上没有比母亲更伟大的人了
I think mother is beyond comparison in the world
10. 要是你能多呆些时候多好啊！
What a nice thing if you stay longer
12. 我绝不怀疑如果我遇上麻烦，比尔会帮助。
It is undoubtful that Bill will give me a hand if I get in trouble
13. 我将永远把北京看作为我的第二故乡。
I will never regard Beijing as my second hometown
15. 我很快就认识到，我的生活现在就取决于我了。如果我要在学业上取得成功，我就必须制定一份学习计划。
I recognized soon that my life depent on myself.
A learning scheme is necessary for the success of my school work
英翻中：
1.This letter, I know, is long past due. I know you’ll forgive the tardiness, you always do.
我熟悉这信，它是很久以前的了。我就知道你就慢慢忘了，你总是这样。
2. In any case, I smiled. In that instant, it was as though a spark jump across the gap between our two hearts.
我以微笑对待任何事。因此，两心之间也就没有隔阂
3. He lit my cigarette but stayed near, looking at me directly in the eyes and continuing to smile.
他帮我点了烟后仍然呆在旁边，直直地看着我并保持微笑
5.When they came in answer to his request, the old man, raising himself on his pillows, pointed through the window towards his orchard.
当他们应这位老人的要求来了的时候，他发疯似地在枕头上蹦起来，手伸出窗外指着他那片果园
8. I dream only that someday --- perhaps as a senior --- I will be able to win a race with as big as the one I got when I lost that race as a freshman.
看不懂……
9.There was nothing quite so humbling as standing outside my elementary school classroom and see you come walking down the hall.
站在我小学教室外看着你从走廊走来这没什么丢脸的（被罚站？……）
10. As freshman（是freshmen吧……）, we do not know what college life has in store for us, but we all know that we must do well in our studies.
作为新生,大多数都不知道什么样的大学生活在等待着我们，但是我们都知道必须要好好学习… - -b
12.It kept the messages secret even if the enemy would see them. But（？？？） the code was too complicated for the blind.
即使被敌人发现了，这些信息仍然被保密。因为密码对外行人来说实在是太复杂了……
1楼的翻译感觉有点僵硬……
我只想看到自己的翻译内容上有哪些不妥，不用重新翻译
提高悬赏……

Answer 1

参考一下：
3. 这个小男孩独自一人时往往挨饿，因为他不会做饭
The little boy is always famished when he is alone, because he can't cook by himself.
4. 看到老人奄奄一息，邻居们一刻也没有耽误，马上请来医生。
The neirbourghs called for the doctors in time when seeing the old who is at his last gasp.(who is serious ill).
6. 穿这件衣服看起来很合身，好像是专门为你做的一样。
The coat is very suitable for you, it seems that it is just made for you.
7. 创造的愿望是很重要的。如果我们只是模仿，那就很难发展新事物了。
Creation is very important. It will be difficult to develop on the way of imitation if we just imitate.
9. 我认为世上没有比母亲更伟大的人了
I think that no one in the world is greater than mothers.
12. 我绝不怀疑如果我遇上麻烦，比尔会帮助。
It is doubt that Bill will give me a hand when I get in troubles.
13. 我将永远把北京看作为我的第二故乡。
I will regard Beijing as my second hometown forever.
15. 我很快就认识到，我的生活现在就取决于我了。如果我要在学业上取得成功，我就必须制定一份学习计划。
Soon I recognized that my life lies on my own. If i want to succeed in my school work, I must make a learning scheme.

1.This letter, I know, is long past due. I know you’ll forgive the tardiness, you always do.
我熟悉这信，它是已经过期的了。我知道你就慢慢原谅缓慢的，你总是这样。
2. In any case, I smiled. In that instant, it was as though a spark jump across the gap between our two hearts.
在任何情况下，我会微笑。在那一时刻，就好像是有一束火花从两心之间的缝隙之中跳了出来。（两颗心之间就产生了火花）
8. I dream only that someday --- perhaps as a senior --- I will be able to win a race with as big as the one I got when I lost that race as a freshman.
我梦想有一天——也许作为高年级生——我将可以和像我一样大的人一起比赛并且取得胜利，而输了比赛的话我就是一个低年级生。