Question

帮忙看一下这句话有没语法错误或是用词不当

Magic helped me to find you in a big crowd, but I can not see through your heart.

Answer 1

Magic helped me to find you in the big crowd, yet I cannot see through your heart.
用yet表示转折，表示“尚且，却”，can not 要连写。

Answer 2

没什么大错,这儿没有明确的过去时间,可考虑将helped 改成 has helped,

并且与but后的分句同属于现在时间范畴,另: 将crowd改成world更好. 即:

Magic has helped me to find you in a big world, but I can not see through your heart.

句意: 魔力帮助我在大千世界里找到了你,但是我却不能看透你的心.

Answer 3

后面的可改成but I can‘t read what you are thinking about？

Answer 4

a多了 big 和crowd重复。换为 in crowd 。